-a few easy steps on how to make it better-

think it over.

check your supplies.

collect what’s necessary to begin the project.

perhaps a light rainfall, or snowfall,

or children playing jumprope, or
maybe a catastrophe of some kind.

think it over.

go easy on dashes and hyphens

of which I am supremely guilty.

go easy on embellishments.

go heavy on the salt of life.

not so heavy on the imagery.

let it breathe on its own without

snazzy comparisons.

lastly

you could say: "there’s a silence to the breath of the poem,

                          even at the end".

you might add: "especially at the end".